Space exploration

Nowadays technology has progressed beyond any limits, actually beyond the boundaries of earth.Space exploration has developed over the years and started being the reason of the human kind will to expand the knowledge of humanity.Every once in a while a huge company of space exploration launches a single space shuttle to space that costs billions dollars.

On the one hand, space exploration has helped humanity to create and improve many things in everyones life such as satellite TV and Mobiles. Thanks to space exploration many people have jobs in this field and the quantity of unemployment has gotten lower. In addition, we also expand the boundaries of earth and acquiring new resources.

On the other hand, space exploration is a negative thing. Every few months a space shuttle is launched into space and it costs billions of dollars.Every shuttle that launches leaves behind a huge amount of pollution that damages the earth. Every country tries to be the most advanced and therefore they spend huge amounts of money on space exploration, instead of improving the life quality of their people.

In conclusion, I believe space exploration is a positive thing that developed our quality of life and I believe it should expand along the years. It has many advantages and all countries should support and develop it. My dream is that in a few hundred years we will be living on the moon.

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Daphna.

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Peer Pressure

Nowadays, many youngsters cut school, use drugs ,smoke and drink. Have you ever thought why it happens. There is a simple explanation that is called "Peer Pressure", meaning the will to fit in and to be liked by society. Everyone wants to fit in even if it means doing insensible things in order to belong to a group.

Youth peer pressure is frequently referred to as a negative form of peer pressure.Youngsters are often effected by their peers , trying to belong to a group. Most of the time this effect causes something that isn't morally right or inconsistent with their values.

When I was in the elementary school my friends were stealing some candies from a nearby store. I, as a kid who wanted to belong, gave in to peer pressure and started stealing as well. I did realize it was a crime but I didn't want to say anything because I was afraid that the other kids would make fun of me.

Eventually, I got caught and had to pay the price.I have learned it the hard way and now I regret the mistakes I made in the past and wish I would have sticked to my believes. However, peer pressure can have a good influence.It can make you improve your self. I believe you shouldn't do anything contradictory to your morals even if it means youngsters will make fun of you. I'm sure it is better than jail.

Much better, Eden. This is a very good essay.(85)
Daphna

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